Gonna make a few of em. This is just my first one. Really like this story. No flame comments or anything please. Maybe just tell me how I can improve my writing. And so starts, Mary in the Mirror!
Yo Bri. That's pretty good, but it was kinda hard to follow. You could try to separate your taglines. Idk if ya'll have learned this yet, so I'll show you an example... and this is for quotes.
"Hey Mary," I said quietly as I as the foggy breath appeared in the mirror again, "was your dad upset?" Mary laughed quietly, "Yeah," she said as she rubbed her bruised arm, "yeah he was."
Yo Bri. That's pretty good, but it was kinda hard to follow. You could try to separate your taglines. Idk if ya'll have learned this yet, so I'll show you an example... and this is for quotes.
ReplyDelete"Hey Mary," I said quietly as I as the foggy breath appeared in the mirror again, "was your dad upset?"
Mary laughed quietly, "Yeah," she said as she rubbed her bruised arm, "yeah he was."
Kinda like that if you get what I'm saying.